Another awesome chapter, the scene where the three devils were talking to Mike was great, and everything was so well written, as always.

Please update soon!

Joe is such an amazing friend. The story Mike is telling him is just crazy and all he thinks of is being there for him. Even though he doesn't even know Ches that well (and also if he likes him or not). That's just wonderful!

Everything before Mike's confusion was spooky as fuck. The three devils showing up and Mike panicking... That really was hard to read. Mike is so afraid about Chester being locked up and being tortured that he really considered letting himself getting dragged to the underworld as well?! Fuck... that shows how much in love he is...

So, I have so many thoughts. First, this was amazingly written. I've never read a supernatural love story, especially not one as enthralling as this. The way you described the governing body of devils was so cool and I don't know why but the fact that there's three ugly ass demons all dressed up in suits and fedoras (of all clothing items) made me giggle. I had the same thought, too: is this what Ches really looks like without his shell? Mike wouldn't care, I don't think.

I felt so sad for Mike here. All he wants is to be with his devil and him crying and having a panic attack out of fear of these creatures and for Chester's safety made me feel awful. I don't know what outcome to expect from Chester's trial and the aftermath but I'm hoping it's a good one. It probably means nothing, but I was curious about the feeling Mike had of something being sucked out of the mark on his leg. I'm glad that the devils left him where he was and Joe showed up when he did. Joe is so good to Mike and so much better than me, because I would have cut off all ties with him once he started telling me about seeing demons and shit (even if, unbeknownst to me, it was true). Nah. But didn't Mike break a rule by telling Joe everything? And does it really matter at this point in time?

Again, wonderfully written, the whole story. So thought out and detailed and who would have thought a devil and a human could have such sweet, funny, loving moments together? I'm so sad it's almost over. It's "MINE " all over again LMAO. What are you writing after this? I legit come to this site to read what you put up lol I'm sure whatever it is, it'll be fantastic. *hugs *

Well, I've been saying for a while that Chester fell in love with Mike, and I figured that time he got punished that it was for getting too close to Chester. So.

The thing that really stopped me in this chapter is when Mike is wondering if Chester really looks like those other devils when he's not in his shell. And then I was wondering if Mike will get to see Chester without his shell. AND THEN I was wondering if he will even care. I don't think he will, if he does get to see Chester that way. I think he'll still see Chester the way he's always seen him.

That whole scene with the devils is awesome and tense, and I liked it when they said they were gonna take Mike's voice (I know, I'm twisted.) I kinda wish they would have, because then Mike wouldn't have screwed up so bad. I know that he thinks he's got nothing left to lose, but I don't think he comprehends how much power the Underworld has, and he's not thinking of the consequences (again.)

The burning of the mark freaks me out, just gonna say. I'm glad Mike told Joe, but also not... I know it will be bad that he did, but it was nice to hear him summarize his relationship with Chester and kinda what he's been thinking/feeling the whole time. Joe is a trooper to sit through all that and a good friend to not leave Mike's side. I hope that doesn't end up being bad for Joe, he's been such a good guy in all this.

So Chester's main crime is falling in love. I adore that. It's like a star-crossed lovers story. <3 I almost have no cares about what happens- the consequences, etc, as long as Mike and Chester get to be together. Which is what I've been wanting all along.

(Don't forget about Dave and Brad, I need to know what happens there too!) *kiss* SO READY for the end, even though I will miss this story so much. Never thought I'd love a fantasy story as much as I love this one!

Chapter 19: I was so relieved that Ches was back. I had serious concerns about him disappearing to the underworld. But you got me really curious about this Gabriel-character now! I'm quite sure we all don't want him to come back but I still want to know more about him!

And then the chapter-ending. That was so hard to read. Losing someone close must feel so horrible and I understand that Mike is begging Chester to help. And I was so happy that he did! And at the same time I was afraid that he will get hurt (is that even possible? I mean he can obviously get hurt in the underworld but what about the human world? Can he get hurt/die?).

Chapter 20: Oh my fucking god! I don't know where to start... So glad that Jason is ok and that Chester was ok as well after fighting with Death. Than the whole scene in Chester's room... So fucking unbelievable hot and sweet and tense and argh... just soooo good! And then the dream... Fuck... My mind is all over the place. I understand why you struggled with this chapter. I mean it is written beautifully (as all the others) but the content is heavy. I have been struggling with writing Chester at all in my stories and this is just heartbreaking. I really hope he is coming back. Mike deserves it and Ches does as well!

I knew that something bad was about to happen when the chapter started out all perfect and happy with them finally making love.

I thought 'Nooo, that can't be, something will destroy their luck!'

Anyway, I really hope for a happy ending, your writing was awesome, like always, and I'm waiting impatiently for the next chapter :)

I'm just catching up with all the chapters of this fic. Oh my God! I love it so much!! This one was a really emotional one, I'm heartbroken... Mike was finally able to ask for what he really wanted and to confess his love and Chester was able to give it to him. Their lovemaking was so sweet and also so hot (not sure how you are able to do this, but it's amazing).

I can only imagine now that these feelings are the reason why all of this is happening and Chester had to leave... I guess he is no longer a demon. I'm not sure Mike will be able to survive this now that Chester admitted he loves him back. Please don't be cruel and let them have their happy ending.

Um, wtf are you doing to me?

I don't even know what to make of this but I know it just made me feel... all the things.

I was sooooo happy but now I'm soooooo sad. Why does Chester have to leave? Has love set him free and that's the meaning of the white? Can he come back? Is Mike going to kill himself to be with him?

My mind is racing with all kinds of stupid questions that are probably way off track but dammit I'm all emotional and confused and MAD AT THAT CLIFFHANGER and I really hope Chester does come back and it's like other times but maybe he's not a devil anymore or something.

Duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude.

I was so happy when woke up and saw this story had been updated. Just yesterday I finished 19 chapters, it's a pleasant feeling.

Anyway, like any other reviewers have said, it's one emotional story. Chester finally admitted his love. My suspicion is Chester had actually felt it way before, that's why he was being 'punished' by the Underworld people (just a theory)

The slash is well-written. It's so good that I didn't feel like reading porn ;)

I know you're used to really long reviews from me, but I just can't. I'm all weepy and sad. I want to curl into a ball in my bed and cry and not get up. Everything about this is written so beautifully. I mean, I really forgot I was reading a slash scene because it was so loving. <3 Mike is going to be devastated. And... what happens to Mike's soul, now that Ches is gone? I hope the contract doesn't transfer to someone else. I'll have to just quit.

My two favorite moments - when Chester lays his hand over Mike's heart, and when Chester says it's time to rest. Oh my god. I just cried. And knew the white stuff was significant. :( I'm so emotional and sad. I want everything to be okay but I don't think it will be.

I started sniffling when time was a topic and cried by the end of the chapter...

It's a very beautiful and emotional chapter!!!

Well done

Damn, so....

damn. So they finally...and then Chester says he loves Mike but....and at the end...

Nah. This gotta get fixed. I'm at work crying my makeup off, bruh. PLEASE FIX SOMEHOW.

OH NO!! nononononono, what's going to happen?! I was on the verge of tears thinking Jason would die (I really like the boy) but then now, Chester. Oh, this cliffhanger is killing me!!

New enemy is here? (yay). Honestly though, I thought Gabriel was an angel, and I'm not sure I'm gonna like 'im (the one in your story, not the real Gabriel) The fact that Mike declared his love for Chester to Gabriel kinda worries me. Isn't it going to bring some trouble?

And look forward to see the development of Brad and Dave. Those two would look good together ;)

Finally Mike confessed his love, even though Chester was unconscious. It was a sad confession :')

The fake fight was so funny, especially because Chester took both ice creams with him. That's true, man. Even if it was zombie apocalypse, save your ice cream!

Mr. and Mrs. Shinoda were not cool. I heavily disapprove parents who control the life of their children. I'm not a parent yet, but when I do, I wish I do not turn out that way. I was freaked out when Mrs. Shinoda saw the scene at the pool and the confrontation she had morning after wasn't pretty. I'm just glad Mike could finally speak out about the true him.

Jason is a sweet boy in here. But, isn't it a bit unfair that he was the only one possessing the memory? If I were him, I would be really upset if my brother didn't remember the fondest memory I have with him :')

my... i'm just about to start chapter 9, why does it say i review chapter 19? lol. don't mind me..

I've been eyeing this story since day one but only now have the chance to read and review. lol. what a shame

Always admire ur writing style, especially when it comes to comedy. Devil Chester is really interesting with his sense of fashion and decor (his room) and his fondness over cheese enchiladas (the list strangely cracked me up!). The concept of upperworld and underworld is unique. Maybe because you called it 'politic' (dunno why, but it sounds a bit enthrilling, lol, silly me).

And, oh my! they're kissing! in public! way to go Mike! and the double date! way to go anna!!

Always those cliffhangers! Another awesome chapter, and yesterday, when I read it for the first time, I had already been thinking about when you would update this story earlier that day :)

Please update soon, I can't wait!

Oh my God! Not another cliffhanger! :D But I'll be sure to check this website every day (I'm not even kidding) for an update. Your story is that excellent and addicting. I'm curious, do you watch Supernatural TV series? This particular chapter just reminded me of the Death character from Season 5 of Supernatural.

I think the only good thing about you updating while I'm at work (every damn time) is that I calm down before I get home and have to sit down and formulate a review. You get all the cursing personally instead of on here, so that's probably a win.

Anyway.

You know I've been trying to piece this together since you started. I've had a million theories and I fully expect that if I have gotten it right, that you give me the world's greatest shoutout when this is over. Damn. I can't even get this out of my head after you update. I think about it for the whole rest of the day until I get my life together and pay attention to real life things again.

So here's where I am now. I've been trying to figure out the whole reason that Mike is so important to Chester that he needed to work so hard to ensure that he 1)got Mike under contract and 2)ended up delivering his soul. I get that Chester doesn't have the best track record, and it could be as simple as that. BUT I think there's something more, because you are the Queen of withholding information and creating questions. Mike has had these dreams about Chester in white, and the thing I keep thinking of is when he told Mike he was asking for the wrong thing.

I wonder if Jason’s accident has anything to do with the Underworld. If it was another test, but this time a test of Chester. To see if he was too involved with Mike, if he would intervene when he shouldn’t and save Jason because he loves Mike. I think he has feelings, even though he’s not supposed to be able to feel feelings the way humans do. I think the most significant sentence in this chapter is: “The devil faced his property; he could see and feel the worry in Mike’s eyes.” It seems like it’s the first time Chester really empathizes with Mike on a human level. I could be wrong, but I think that’s what changed the game here. I think Mike’s emotions affected him to the point that he defied the natural order of things, but to what end? Did it sacrifice Chester? How does he “die” anyway, if he’s a devil. Does he just stop existing? What happens to Mike’s contract with him if he dies? I wonder if the visions Mike has had of the future with Ches in white signal that Chester is not really there anymore, but they are still linked somehow. Until Mike dies, they are still together even if Chester can’t be part of the physical world, because of the contract. A binding of Mike’s soul and Chester’s… being. I don’t know. It makes my head hurt in a good way to try to figure it out.

Chester doesn’t think twice about saving Jason, and doesn’t tell Mike what the consequences could be. And Mike is grieving and doesn’t think to ask either, until he’s already told Chester what he wanted. Mike’s heart is so good in this, and I think that goodness had changed Chester somehow, as I’ve theorized before.

If Chester doesn’t “die”, there must be consequences for saving Jason. You can’t just cheat death. And what would have happened to Mike if he’d witnessed Jason’s soul being taken? I have to admit that idea shook me a bit because I was with my dad when he passed, and the idea of death damaging you is one I relate to. Obviously not on a supernatural level, like this story, but just in the way it damages your heart. So I wonder what you had in mind with that.

Gabriel was almost an afterthought by the time I got to the end, but I wonder what Chester was going to tell Mike and then changed his mind. It has something to do with what will happen to Chester if he fails to deliver Mike’s soul, I think, but I don’t know what. I loved Chester trying to get info from Mike, and thought it was interesting that he decided it made him too tired to try to get in Mike’s head now. That’s probably significant, too. By the way, I loved Mike’s thoughts waiting for Chester to return, about evil and how Chester isn’t evil. And this is so evident when Chester is holding Mike’s hand in the hospital, and then that whole scene with Death in the room and Mike telling Jason goodbye… just. Fuck. I had my hand over my mouth the whole time. You make me feel everything. Good and bad. I laughed when Chester asked Mike if he wanted him to set fire to that guys foot, and then in the next instant I’m crying because it’s so touching. You write intimate scenes that have no sex in them but are hotter than any slash on this site, and your kisses are ridiculous. I just…

(You know I fucking love your writing, right? Like, admire you on ridiculous levels. I used to think I was a pretty decent writer, but you have such original and amazing ideas, and then you can actually execute them too. And now I’m being all fangirly and such, but it’s so true. I’m like a fourth grader compared to you.)

My last thought - wondering if Mike will go to Jason or Chester first in the next chapter. I’m betting Chester. <3 And I’m sorry for rambling on for 925 words.

Dude, what the fu-

What was that? Tell me Chester is okay. I can't. Nope.

I'm really glad that Jason's going to be okay but just...gosh, there was so much packed into this chapter, I don't even know my feelings on it all. I REALLY just want Mike and Chester to be in a happy interspecies relationship like they deserve without all this extra. What I will say is, Chester's comforting of Mike and making that sacrifice to save Jason has L.O.V.E written all over it! Need the next chapter SOON PLEASE!