Fantastic job with this! Like others have said, I love that you chose Phoenix for this role, and you paint a great image of him as this somewhat mythic, evil character who lacks feeling and empathy for those he wrongs. The personification of all these torture objects leading up to the living being behind the crimes is a great way to play this out, too. I really felt the rising action and everything was well paced.

I think you're a good writer, but this is somehow set apart from your other stuff, a step above - the concept is simple, the structure is innovative, and the prose carries it all off astonishingly well. You made all the right moves with this; everything is in the right place and the writing strikes the perfect balance between minimal and excessive. I loved it. <33

Christ, this was powerful. I love how the objects take a life of their own and then it closes with Phi's thoughts. Oh, brilliance. <3

So great. I loved this. It was dark and I loved the theme. I also love that you used Phoenix, as he's often neglected.

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Phi dude! You are everything!!

Oh wow that was so good. I loved how detached it all was. As if what he was doing was perfectly fine. Dave's ego is hot =P

I also loved the single lines after each paragraph describing what he does. We didn't need a huge indepth description to picture what he does because of the way you wrote it. Which was fantastic, by the way =D

*sexes you up*